Somedays

kitty
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Somedays Oct 2, 2009 22:55:36 GMT -5

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Post by kitty on Oct 2, 2009 22:55:36 GMT -5

|Somedays|
|PG|
|Life|
|to my mommy and my morgan. i <3 you both so much, you are always there for me. |

Somedays,
I love my life

Somedays,
I hate my life.

Somedays,
I just need to be left alone.

Somedays,
I just need my friends.

Somedays,
I'm in a good mood.

Somedays,
I'm in a bad mood.

Somedays,
I just need a break.

Somedays,
I need to get away. From everything.

But most days,
I just need you.

xunpredictablel
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Somedays Oct 3, 2009 22:30:14 GMT -5

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Post by xunpredictablel on Oct 3, 2009 22:30:14 GMT -5

Okay, again- very simplistic but this time I REALLY liked it. You could use better words, for example instead of bad, use something that means something similar to bad.

I loved the end. That was very nice - I liked how it went against the structure of the rest of the poem and just threw out a very emotional thing.

It's good.

i'm sorry i have to say it but you look like you're sad.
your smile is gone, i noticed it bad.
the cure is if you let in just a little more love.
i promise you this, a little's enough.

-ava

shiina Global Moderator Posts: 186	Somedays Oct 4, 2009 12:43:43 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by shiina on Oct 4, 2009 12:43:43 GMT -5 I know who this is about Abd quite frankly, I love your mom too, katrina Your dad, not so much. Who hides chocolate? EVIL.
	I believe in Jesus Christ, my savior. If you do too and aren't afraid to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.

kitty Full Member Wink <3 Posts: 116	Somedays Oct 4, 2009 21:29:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by kitty on Oct 4, 2009 21:29:35 GMT -5 lol. especially THEN!

shiina Global Moderator Posts: 186	Somedays Oct 5, 2009 14:58:06 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by shiina on Oct 5, 2009 14:58:06 GMT -5 Trust the Midus touch, the story says everything he touched turned into gold, but it really turned into chocolate. they need to get their facts straight.
	I believe in Jesus Christ, my savior. If you do too and aren't afraid to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.

kitty Full Member Wink <3 Posts: 116	Somedays Oct 6, 2009 16:34:13 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by kitty on Oct 6, 2009 16:34:13 GMT -5 HAHA! so true!

shiina Global Moderator Posts: 186	Somedays Oct 9, 2009 12:40:31 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by shiina on Oct 9, 2009 12:40:31 GMT -5 nom nom nom pauses... Nom nom.
	I believe in Jesus Christ, my savior. If you do too and aren't afraid to admit it, then copy and paste this in your signature.

Post by kitty on Oct 2, 2009 22:55:36 GMT -5

Post by xunpredictablel on Oct 3, 2009 22:30:14 GMT -5

Post by shiina on Oct 4, 2009 12:43:43 GMT -5

Post by kitty on Oct 4, 2009 21:29:35 GMT -5

Post by shiina on Oct 5, 2009 14:58:06 GMT -5

Post by kitty on Oct 6, 2009 16:34:13 GMT -5

Post by shiina on Oct 9, 2009 12:40:31 GMT -5