Clover

[shiina]

|TITLE| Clover
|RATING| PG
|THEME| Religious (I guess...)
|NOTES| Again, I'm not so sure what the theme for this would be. Religious seems the most logical, though I didn't really intend for it to be... Bad habit, I need to explore new genres.


A concept as old as time,
as old as riddles, as old as rhyme,
When you need a pick-me-up,
all you need is a little luck.

You'll drink your wine and eat your bread,
but still somehow have that feel of dread.
You just may feel youve gotten stuck,
But all you need is a little luck.

You feel as though your life is dry,
as if your broken wings can't fly.
But all it takes is one quick pluck,
For all you need is a little luck.

[xunpredictablel]

I like this. It doesn't seem as deep as your other poems, but the rhymes were good and very solid. Again, there was a reference to God, and a kind of disbelief (although a sense of understanding) that someone could be upset still when Jesus has sacrificed his body and blood for us. (in the verse that states the wine and bread.) And I can truly understand how this poem goes, because I know how high up God can take me when I'm feeling my worst. While I am not a huge believer, not avid either, I certainly know He's there and am aware of His existance, and I revel in it.

I love it. The rhymes were great and not at all cliche, I think that's what makes a poem's structure perfect.

Fantastic. Please continue writing .