Post by xunpredictablel on Oct 22, 2009 9:55:16 GMT -5
|Title|10.22.09
|Rating|PG
|Theme| -
|Notes| I loved this one so much that I decided to be courageous and post it in the critique board. You guys know capitalization isn't my thing . Look up Galene , you'll get the meaning to the last part, then .
the taste of tragedy stands still, bittersweet upon your tongue .
wings burnt up in the night , his eyes upturned and watching, laughing, and he didn’t move.
horrific smells of burning flesh surrounds you, and your freedom was at the hands of human -
who blames them for capturing your perfection on the world? the price of a rotting earth is desperation.
the price of innocent beauty is taint .
skeletons . they haunt your dreams , barely covered in skin, cheekbones high and regal.
elflike in their walk. your hands reach up and touch the fading flesh, but their skin shrinks from your touch,
ever escapable. but your eyes see the inexplicable beauty in their atrophy.
your hands want the incredible feel of skin – silk, the finest of linens forever .
but they dance away, too far to touch , too far to reach out and grasp the veil above the soul.
can you feel me reach ? i feel the energy upon my fingertips..
attraction – are you allured towards my healing powers? my light eyes stare into your soul and take away the pain .
from where are you ? not physically – not . how are you faded ? how are you drifting and lost ?
because I can bring touch – I bring love into an otherwise listless life . you must trust .
and the effect is not lost on you , because i feel your frozen breath on my neck .
can it be thawed?
I feel your head in quivering thoughts -
can they be slowed?
You’ve wrapped around chains – layer upon layer upon my body .
But they’re weightless , and I can fly .
Your eyes upturn and I see the light I wait for -
A leash against my wrist , protection against my hips.
Your hands click the lock and the weights fall from my body ,
Finally – the storm has lifted and ran away .
Your eyes brought the calm from chaos.
My Galene ,
Take me from these treacherous lands.
Lead me to the sea.
Give to me my waterlegs
And all I wish to be -
My Galene ,
Hello, my name is Lili.
I’ve been waiting for you.
|Rating|PG
|Theme| -
|Notes| I loved this one so much that I decided to be courageous and post it in the critique board. You guys know capitalization isn't my thing . Look up Galene , you'll get the meaning to the last part, then .
the taste of tragedy stands still, bittersweet upon your tongue .
wings burnt up in the night , his eyes upturned and watching, laughing, and he didn’t move.
horrific smells of burning flesh surrounds you, and your freedom was at the hands of human -
who blames them for capturing your perfection on the world? the price of a rotting earth is desperation.
the price of innocent beauty is taint .
skeletons . they haunt your dreams , barely covered in skin, cheekbones high and regal.
elflike in their walk. your hands reach up and touch the fading flesh, but their skin shrinks from your touch,
ever escapable. but your eyes see the inexplicable beauty in their atrophy.
your hands want the incredible feel of skin – silk, the finest of linens forever .
but they dance away, too far to touch , too far to reach out and grasp the veil above the soul.
can you feel me reach ? i feel the energy upon my fingertips..
attraction – are you allured towards my healing powers? my light eyes stare into your soul and take away the pain .
from where are you ? not physically – not . how are you faded ? how are you drifting and lost ?
because I can bring touch – I bring love into an otherwise listless life . you must trust .
and the effect is not lost on you , because i feel your frozen breath on my neck .
can it be thawed?
I feel your head in quivering thoughts -
can they be slowed?
You’ve wrapped around chains – layer upon layer upon my body .
But they’re weightless , and I can fly .
Your eyes upturn and I see the light I wait for -
A leash against my wrist , protection against my hips.
Your hands click the lock and the weights fall from my body ,
Finally – the storm has lifted and ran away .
Your eyes brought the calm from chaos.
My Galene ,
Take me from these treacherous lands.
Lead me to the sea.
Give to me my waterlegs
And all I wish to be -
My Galene ,
Hello, my name is Lili.
I’ve been waiting for you.
