Mom

[kitty]

|Mom|
|G|
|Family|
| this is to my mommy obviously. i really couldnt think of anything...|

Mom

I always have someone,
Someone to support me.
She’s as clumsy as a june bug,
But as strong as a rock
In her feelings.
She’s as sweet as a butterfly,
As lovely as a flower

She’s always here for me
Supportive of me.
She never contradicts my career choice.
She has it tough,
Tougher than most,
With her disability.

Wanting to adopt for me,
So I can have a sibling.
But the government wont let
Her adopt an infant,
Because of her M.S.,
Even though she is as caring as a
Momma cat.

She is as short as a stump,
But her heart is as big as the
State of Texas.
She is my mother, my mommy,
The one I can lean on when im upset.

And I love her.

[xunpredictablel]

Interesting. I very much liked it because of the simple love and adoration you seem to have towards your mother. It was interesting, but it made you seem a lot younger than you are- just because of the way you wrote it. The ideas within the poem seem mature, but for some reason I can just see you as a young child, especially with the last stanza - where you use the word 'mommy' which I very much relate to a young girl with a deep relationship with her mother.

One thing - I didn't like how you said she was strong as a rock in her feelings. It might make sense to you, which is good ! and if that's the case, then disregard this. But I was thinking that maybe you meant something to the effect of strong in her beliefs or ideas - because to be strong in ones feelings just doesn't seem to make much sense to me, unless you meant she is strong in that she is always feeling ? She faces her feelings and is not afraid to feel them. In that case, then I understand wholeheartedly because that is what I try so hard to do.

It was good, you seem to be writing better poems. Good job.

[kitty]

uuhhh that was one of my first...

[shiina]

*giggles* awkward moment? heehee.

[butterfly princess7]

kitty this poem looks wonderful...you have a fantastic talent...you can and will inspire many with your words.

[kitty]

awwhhh, tiffy, thanks i <3 ya but, im not that good.