Post by kitty on Oct 6, 2009 18:48:54 GMT -5
|TITLE| Forgotten|RATING| UR
|GENRE| Tragedy
|SHORT SYNOPSIS| This story takes place in Alvin, Texas in present time.
|CHAPTER NUMBER| First Chapter
|NOTES| Well, i started writing this last year and had a lot more than this, but decided to rewrite the begining. i ended up losing the rest. :/ i will post this as i write it. Advice and criticizing is welcome! (but not on my spelling!)
|GENRE| Tragedy
|SHORT SYNOPSIS| This story takes place in Alvin, Texas in present time.
|CHAPTER NUMBER| First Chapter
|NOTES| Well, i started writing this last year and had a lot more than this, but decided to rewrite the begining. i ended up losing the rest. :/ i will post this as i write it. Advice and criticizing is welcome! (but not on my spelling!)
Becca was driving home from a party at one in the morning. She was falling asleep, despite the noise of her best friend, Dani, and her boyfriend, Jack, chattering away in the background. she looked to the passenger seat. Raenia was already passed out, her long black hair against the window in what looked like a very uncomfortable postition. All three of them had been drinking, Becca being the only one that hadn't. "Next time we leave BEFORE one! im falling asleep up here!" becca yelled through the racket of the two.
"Alright, alright, Becca! Calm down!" Jack said, his words slurred to where she could barely understand him.
"yeah Becca, calm down!" Dani said in a crystal clear voice. Drinking doesnt effect Dani as much as it does the others, but Becca wasnt going to take any chances by letting her drive. Becca glanced back at them as they joked crazily around. she rolled her eyes and turend back to the road. that was when she learned that she had made a big mistake by driving when she was half asleep. She was in the wrong lane...
And there where the headlights of a black suburban headed right towards her little blue cadillac convertable. She was so scared she could smell it, could taste it, but she didnt have enough time to get over before she went blind with fear, heard a big CRASH! and blacked out...
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"Becca?! oh my god!... I dont know... pull through...very bad... wreck... should be waking soon... if not..." Becca heard in between black outs. She didn't recognize the voices, and she wondered who Becca was. All she knew was that her head... "hurts..." that her whole body hurt.
The voices outside of her head heard her say 'hurt' and a male voice said, "...She's waking up..." beore she blacked out one last time...
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"I think she's waking up!" Dr. Ross Jete said, looking at Becca's worried parents. Her mom, Alison Kelley, had her long, straight, thick, beautiful blond hair pulled up into a sloppy ponytail. She had dack bruises under her eyes from lack of sleep and worrying about her daughter. Her crystal blue eyes had, unlike five minutes before, a spark of hope in them. They alone brought out the beauty in her plain face.
Becca's fater, Alison's husband, George Kelley, also had dark circles under his eyes. His short black hair was disheaveled from running hiss hands through it. He was looking at his daughter like he couldn't believe what he had heard.
All of a sudden the steady beep... beep... of Becca's heartbeat on the heartrate moniter turned into a long unbreaking beeeeeep.
"Alright, alright, Becca! Calm down!" Jack said, his words slurred to where she could barely understand him.
"yeah Becca, calm down!" Dani said in a crystal clear voice. Drinking doesnt effect Dani as much as it does the others, but Becca wasnt going to take any chances by letting her drive. Becca glanced back at them as they joked crazily around. she rolled her eyes and turend back to the road. that was when she learned that she had made a big mistake by driving when she was half asleep. She was in the wrong lane...
And there where the headlights of a black suburban headed right towards her little blue cadillac convertable. She was so scared she could smell it, could taste it, but she didnt have enough time to get over before she went blind with fear, heard a big CRASH! and blacked out...
____________________________________________________
"Becca?! oh my god!... I dont know... pull through...very bad... wreck... should be waking soon... if not..." Becca heard in between black outs. She didn't recognize the voices, and she wondered who Becca was. All she knew was that her head... "hurts..." that her whole body hurt.
The voices outside of her head heard her say 'hurt' and a male voice said, "...She's waking up..." beore she blacked out one last time...
___________________________________________________
"I think she's waking up!" Dr. Ross Jete said, looking at Becca's worried parents. Her mom, Alison Kelley, had her long, straight, thick, beautiful blond hair pulled up into a sloppy ponytail. She had dack bruises under her eyes from lack of sleep and worrying about her daughter. Her crystal blue eyes had, unlike five minutes before, a spark of hope in them. They alone brought out the beauty in her plain face.
Becca's fater, Alison's husband, George Kelley, also had dark circles under his eyes. His short black hair was disheaveled from running hiss hands through it. He was looking at his daughter like he couldn't believe what he had heard.
All of a sudden the steady beep... beep... of Becca's heartbeat on the heartrate moniter turned into a long unbreaking beeeeeep.