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Post by Sàmmius McGennien on Jun 1, 2010 0:15:22 GMT -5
|TITLE| Untitled. |RATING| G. |THEME| General/life? |STYLE| Freestyle. |NOTES| I imagined the beginning of all things, and then I realized that to one person, the beginning of all things could be just one gift. This was written spontaneously, as per usual.
When she breathed, The wind began to blow.
When she laughed, The butterflies began to flutter.
When she jumped, The earth began to spin.
When she laughed, The flowers began to bloom.
When she cried, The rain began to filter the world.
When she breathed, Her mother breathed.
When she laughed, Her mother laughed.
When she jumped, Her mother jumped.
When she laughed, Her mother tried.
When she cried, Her mother cried.
When she tried, Nothing could stop her.
When she left, Nobody could find her.
When it was over, She was there.
When she died, The world ended.
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Post by xunpredictablel on Jun 1, 2010 10:35:38 GMT -5
This is really good - reminded me of Seventeen Isn't So Sweet by Red Jumpsuit Apparatus . I liked the comparison of her to the world. It's like she's the one who brought hope to so many people, and when she died, so did everyone else. What a huge part of Gothic literature, by the way. Edgar Allen Poe and Shelley both really centered their short stories/novels around that. Interesting that you would post this when I was reading them I don't think it was your best, but it was certainly good. Bravo.
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